The diagram below shows the recycling process for aluminum cans. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram shows the process of how
aluminium
cans
are recycled.
In general, the entire recycling process of aluminium
is man-made with a cyclical style of execution and it also
involves several steps, starting with thrown used cans
and culminating with usage.
Observing the diagram in detail, it is obvious that the process takes place once cans
are thrown into trash bags by customers. This
step is followed by collecting the cans
through the garbage truck. Before shredding and compressing these cans
, they are being cleaned and sorted with the help of modern technologies.
After each can is shredded, pure aluminium
is heated and melted, and the final product is rolled with tapes of 2.5 and 6.5 millimetres thick. Finally
, after being reshaped and recycled, aluminium
looks like a can again and is ready for the last
stage, which is reusing; however
, 1/5 of all cans
in the UK are recycled.Submitted by Umar on
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