The diagram below shows the different steps to make a simple ice cream recipe at home.
The diagram below shows the 6 steps about how to cook a simple
ice
cream
at home. Overall
, the 6 steps are preparation, pasteurisation, ageing, freezing, adding extras and hardening.
Firstly
, we prepare gathering
Wrong verb form
gathered
ingredients
and some water, some cup
of juice and milk in the bowl by utensil. The second Fix the agreement mistake
cups
step
is pasteurisation. In this
step
, while
we set fire to a building, we are mixing
some milk, sugar and Wrong verb form
mix
ingredients
. Next,
the third step
is ageing, which
the Change preposition
in which
ingredients
are refrigerated in ice
.
In addition
, after these 3 steps, the fourth step
is freezing. Ingredients
are cooled in refrigerator
. Add an article
the refrigerator
a refrigerator
In addition
, the 5th step
is adding extras
flavour. Change the noun form
extra
Finally
, the 6th step
is that
hardening. For the final Correct determiner usage
apply
step
of hardening the ice
cream
, pour the ice
cream
mix into a dish with the lid on, then
chill in the refrigerator for around 10 minutes to harden the ice
cream
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