The diagram below shows the different steps to make a simple ice cream recipe at home.

The diagram below shows the different steps to make a simple ice cream recipe at home.
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The diagram below shows the 6 steps about how to cook a simple
ice
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cream
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at home.
Overall
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, the 6 steps are preparation, pasteurisation, ageing, freezing, adding extras and hardening.
Firstly
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, we
prepare gathering
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gathered
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ingredients
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and some water, some
cup
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cups
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of juice and milk in the bowl by utensil. The second
step
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is pasteurisation. In
this
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step
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,
while
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we set fire to a building, we
are mixing
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mix
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some milk, sugar and
ingredients
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.
Next,
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the third
step
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is ageing,
which
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in which
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the
ingredients
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are refrigerated in
ice
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.
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, after these 3 steps, the fourth
step
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is freezing.
Ingredients
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are cooled in
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
a refrigerator
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.
In addition
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, the 5th
step
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is adding
extras
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extra
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flavour.
Finally
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, the 6th
step
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is
that
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apply
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hardening. For the final
step
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of hardening the
ice
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cream
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, pour the
ice
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cream
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mix into a dish with the lid on,
then
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chill in the refrigerator for around 10 minutes to harden the
ice
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cream
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words ice, cream, ingredients, step with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ingredient
  • Utensil
  • Heavy cream
  • Vanilla extract
  • Frothy
  • Dissolve
  • Freezer-safe container
  • Prevent freezer burn
  • Ice crystals
  • Smooth texture
  • Soften
  • Serve
  • Toppings
  • Fruits
  • Syrup
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