Some people thinks that scientists experimenting with animals in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people
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that scientists experimenting with
animals
in a laboratory is the only
way
we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use. To what extent do you agree or disagree with
this
opinion? It is sometimes argued that whether the test on
animals
in a laboratory is the only method for us to make sure the latest new product will be safe for people to use. From my point of view, there are some advantages to
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animal testing,
however
, as technology
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, there are many other ways to ensure the safety of the product. In my opinion, it is efficient and
economy
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to have unpublished
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tested on
nonhuman
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. The
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time of
animals
can be shorter than people, and it is easier to get enough
animals
tested for the test.
For example
, we can get the result in a shorter time if pigs
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the medicine compared to
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.
Moreover
, it is hard to collect that large number
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data from patients. Since participants of the experiment have to be paid, using other life being is more
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. Objectives got paid 200 dollars for an hour, but we can have more than one mouse with the same amount of money.
However
, animal
experimenting
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can be a useful
way
,
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intelligence simulation can be a less harmful method that we can choose
according to
the technology out to date. Living in a world with advancing technologies growing so fast, mock the reaction of
human
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body after taking the medicine is available. In conclusion, I agree that the efficiency and the advantage of
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make it
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easy
way
to get the products tested by
animals
, but I argue that artificial intelligence simulation is another
way
to do it.
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task response
Ensure all your arguments are well-explained and supported with relevant examples. Your current examples could benefit from being more detailed and directly related to the point being made.
coherence cohesion
Focus on clearer transitions between sentences and ideas to maintain a smoother flow throughout the essay.
task response
You have made clear arguments both for and against animal testing, which shows a balanced perspective.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion which frames your argument well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • guarantee
  • safe
  • human use
  • scientists
  • experimenting
  • laboratory
  • animal testing
  • valuable information
  • alternative methods
  • equally effective
  • product safety
  • ethical concerns
  • cruel
  • inhumane
  • technologies
  • advancements
  • research
  • reduce
  • replace
  • regulations
  • guidelines
  • ethical treatment
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