The graph below shows the population of foxes on four diffeent Californian islands between 1994 and 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

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the illustrated line diagram represents the population of

foxes

in four

californian

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Californian

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islands

listed

Santa

Catalina

Santa

Cruz,

Santa

Rosa and

San

Miguel between 1994 and 2004.

To begin

with,

Santa

Catalina

and

Santa

Cruz

data

represents

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interwined

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intertwined

data

over the years which started at 1333

foxes

and around 1500

foxes

in 1994 respectively,

this

count

steeply fell down to just over 200

foxes

Santa

Catalina

and above 666

foxes

in 1998.

This

declining trend ended in 2000 with both

island

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reaching fell down leaving only 15

foxes

in total

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each

islands

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island

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. For

Santa

Catalina

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Catalina,

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this

count

rose to 333

foxes

with sudden growth

while

Santa

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the Santa

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Cruz fox

count

observed

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with

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apply

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a slow gradual rise at 51

foxes

Moreover

this

pattern broke with

the

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both

islands

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island's

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foxes

count

climbing up to 1666 by 2014

On the other hand

, the

data

representing

Santa

Rosa and

San

Miguel

observed

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to have an initial

count

of 1780 and above 333

foxes

in 1994 respectively.

This

count

later lapsed down to only 15

foxes

and marginally above 15

foxes

in both

islands

Although

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this

pattern later improved with a

foxes

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fox

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count

rising to 333

foxes

Santa

Catalina

and 51

foxes

San

Miguel.

This

data

improvement continued with

foxes

count

jumping to 1666

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each island by 2014.

Overall

, all

island

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islands

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suffered a great loss in

foxes

with

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which

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along the years improved and reached back near to their initial

count

by 2014 except

San

Rosa which was only able to reach

one third

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of their initial

count

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