The graphs below show the development of Brindell from 1800 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the development of Brindell from 1800 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs illustrate the development area of
Brindell
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between 1800 and 2000.
Overall
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, there were 2 things as the most noticeable transformation of infrastructure construction for the past 2 centuries,
such
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as the building of a factory and
Bun
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Hill
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village
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for staff.
According to
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the pictures, in the initial period, there are several parts of
Brindell
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,
such
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as
farmland
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(crops and
animals
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), river stour, and
Brindell
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. The
farmland
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animals
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is
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are
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located in the right part of
Brindell
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, where woodland is opposite Farm Land. In the middle of the
Farmland
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and
animals
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and woodland, there is river stour and goes to the northern as the neighbour of woodland, there
was
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farmland
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crop.
Furthermore
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, in 1900 and 2000, there had been some changes because of the infrastructure building. After being smaller in 1900, the woodland
had been
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was
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separated again to build
Bun
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Hill
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Park,
whereas
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in
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1900, the
farmland
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animals
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transformed to be industry and
Bun
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Hill
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village
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for workers with separated areas. Afterwards, a century later
village
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for workers was getting larger and
Bun
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Hill
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Park became the
village
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for workers.
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, the
Brindell
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,
farmland
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crops, and river stour had not had any significant changes.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words brindell, bun, hill, village, farmland, animals with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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