The graphs below show the development of Brindell from 1800 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the development of Brindell from 1800 to 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs illustrate the development area of
Brindell
between 1800 and 2000.
Overall
, there were 2 things as the most noticeable transformation of infrastructure construction for the past 2 centuries,
such
as the building of a factory and
Bun
Hill
village
for staff.
According to
the pictures, in the initial period, there are several parts of
Brindell
,
such
as
farmland
(crops and
animals
), river stour, and
Brindell
. The
farmland
animals
is
Change the verb form
are
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located in the right part of
Brindell
, where woodland is opposite Farm Land. In the middle of the
Farmland
and
animals
and woodland, there is river stour and goes to the northern as the neighbour of woodland, there
was
Wrong verb form
is
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farmland
crop.
Furthermore
, in 1900 and 2000, there had been some changes because of the infrastructure building. After being smaller in 1900, the woodland
had been
Wrong verb form
was
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separated again to build
Bun
Hill
Park,
whereas
in
Add the comma(s)
, in
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1900, the
farmland
animals
transformed to be industry and
Bun
Hill
village
for workers with separated areas. Afterwards, a century later
village
for workers was getting larger and
Bun
Hill
Park became the
village
for workers.
Finally
, the
Brindell
,
farmland
crops, and river stour had not had any significant changes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brindell, bun, hill, village, farmland, animals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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