Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.

Topic: The tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the chart shows how it was distributed.
The provided table and pie charts
represents
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represent
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the data about
police
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the police
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budget
between 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.
Overall
, as
it
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apply
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can be seen the total
budget
and
its
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apply
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every
sources
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source
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increased in 2018 compared to 2017,
however
, it must be
notice
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noted
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that in 2018 the whole spending which was for salary of police
had
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apply
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decreased significantly
while
technologies
had
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slightly
increase
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increased
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when buildings and transport remained stable. Police
budget
had grown
gradially
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gradually
, from 304.7m to 318.6m
overall
,
while
it
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its
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sources
also
changed, respectively.
For instance
,
National
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the National
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Government showed
minimally
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growth to 177.8m from 175.5m.
Whereas
, other
sources
jumped to only half of
million
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a million
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, from 38m to 38.5m.
Nevertheless
, it
mus
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must
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to
notice
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noted
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local taxes considerably rocketed compared to
National
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the National
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Government and other
sources
, climbing from just more than 90m to
sligthly
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slightly
more than 100m. The spending of the
budget
changed dramatically at that time. Salaries that had 3 quarters of all total spending, declined for just less than 70% in 2018.
Moreover
, technologies
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risen
rised
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rose
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for 75% of its own, from 8% to 14%,
however
the
budget
for buildings and transport stagnated
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, sources, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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