The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit , during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below
illustrated
the amount of of Wrong verb form
illustrates
the
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apply
visitors
to Ashdown
Museum
during the year
before and after refurbishment
. Although
, the charts show the Correct word choice
However
result
of surveys asking Fix the agreement mistake
results
of
Change preposition
about
visitors
satisfaction . Change noun form
visitors'
visitor's
Overall
, the number
of visitors
to Ashdown
museum
Capitalize word
Museum
are
increased Unnecessary verb
apply
dramaticly
from the Correct your spelling
dramatically
year
before to the year
after refurbishment
. In
the other hand, the results of surveys of Change preposition
On
visitors
Fix the agreement mistake
visitor
satisfication
show some important points which are the Correct your spelling
satisfaction
number
of visitors
who are very statisfied
increased sharply , Correct your spelling
satisfied
while
the visitors
who are dissatisfied Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
decrease
sharply, Wrong verb form
decreased
while
the visitors
who are dissatisfied Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
decrease
sharply in the same period of time.
It can be seen from the table down that the Wrong verb form
decreased
number
of visitors
rose from 74.000 to 92.000 during the year
before and after the refurbishment
.
Looking in more detial
Correct your spelling
detail
to
the charts below which show the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction. The Change preposition
at
number
of people who are very satisfied rose signfiently
from 15 to 35 in the Correct your spelling
significantly
year
after. There was then
a steep rise of
the Change preposition
in
visitors
who Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
are
Wrong verb form
were
statisfied
Correct your spelling
satisfied
of
visiting Change preposition
with
Ashdown
Museum
from around 30 vistior
in the before Correct your spelling
visitors
year
of Add an article
the year
a year
refurbishment
to around 40 visitors
in the after of refurbishment
. So these are showing similar trend from The charts.
In contrast
, The number
of the
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apply
visitors
who are dissatisfied of
the Change preposition
with
Ashdown
museum
Capitalize word
Museum
decline
sharply from 40 to 15 during the period given. Wrong verb form
declined
Although
, the amount of Correct word choice
However
the
people who are very dissatisfied Correct article usage
apply
was
levelled out before plummeting to a low of 15.
One notable point is that the Unnecessary verb
apply
number
of visitor
who were not given any response Change to a plural noun
visitors
in
before and after Change preposition
apply
refurbishment
had equal
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an equal
number
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