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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. write about 150 words

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. write about 150 words
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The given two maps illustrate the before and after of an island, which underwent a substantial number of constructions in order to become more tourist-friendly.
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, a huge recreational complex was erected alongside
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other entertainment facilities, as they foster
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total relaxation and an astonishing time-passing in the region. First and foremost, once a huge deserted area turned into a liveable heaven with numerous cottages and accommodations, which are put up in two circles and connected by neat footways.
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, at the conjunction of those paths is the reception, which connects the restaurant and the pier via the vehicle track, north and south
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 the map, respectively.
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, the sightseers are able to use various boats
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 the southern part of the island, as
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 will make their trip to
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 place amusing.
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walking distance to
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, around 200 metres, tourists can enjoy the times of their lives sunbathing at the beach and swimming in the sea, safe and sound. Despite the island still being partially dehumanised, in my opinion, it is crucial to keep it the way it is, so the sightseers can enjoy the indigenous nature of it.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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