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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph shows the amounts of
waste
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 generated by 3
companies
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 during the span of 15 years.
It is clear that
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companies
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 A and
B
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 have reduced the amount of
waste
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 during these 15 years
whereas
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company
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 C has increased it.
Company
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B
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 decreased their
waste
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 to almost 3 in 2015
tonnes
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 starting from 8.5
tonnes
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 in 2000. It is evident that
company
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B
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 significantly reduced their
waste
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 production after 2005, until which it saw an incline.
On the other hand
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,
Company
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 A which had started with the most amount of junk at 12
tonnes
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 showed a steady decline during the years 2000-2015 and reduced it adequately to about 9
tonnes
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.
In contrast
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 to the other
to
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two
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companies
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,
Company
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 C started with the lowest
waste
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 in 2000 at about 4
tonnes
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 but since
then
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 has
showed
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shown
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 an incline till the year 2015
with
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apply
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producing more than twice the amount of junk it started with at about 10
tonnes
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.
To conclude
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,
Companies
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 A and
B
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 showed a decline in
waste
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 production
while
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Company
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 C showed an incline.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, companies, b, company, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amounts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • significant changes
  • increase
  • decrease
  • waste production
  • period
  • compare
  • analyze
  • main features
  • highlight
  • decline
  • rise
  • steady
  • variations
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