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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes are recycled. They say that only way to increase recycling is a for government to make it legal requirement. To what Tex and do you think clause are needed to make people recycle more of their waste

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There is no doubt that these days
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people
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 am going to talk about the problems and causes of why
people
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 think it is a big
proplem
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 that most
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the
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people
 don'
t
 recycle often it is not healthy and
un professional
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 to throw ur waste just like that. The main reason
people
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t
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 think that individuals need to learn from
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 early age that recycling is important in every way and is respectful.
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 a substantial drawback to not
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 waste it has a lot of bad aspects.
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coherence and cohesion
Your essay needs a clearer and more detailed structure. Consider starting with an introduction that lays out the main arguments you will discuss. Follow this with body paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, and finish with a conclusion restating your main points and briefly summarizing your stance.
task achievement
Your essay should fully address all parts of the task. Here, you need to discuss more comprehensively whether making recycling a legal requirement is necessary and suggest other measures that could help. Add specific, relevant examples to support your points.
lexical resource
Avoid using informal language like 'ur.' Aim to maintain a formal tone throughout your essay, and ensure that your sentences are grammatically correct.
task achievement
Your essay identifies the core issue of insufficient recycling and starts to explore possible solutions. This shows an understanding of the task prompt.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion on the subject, mentioning that early education on the importance of recycling could be beneficial.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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