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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
highest
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top
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 ten countries for the producing and consuming of
electricity
 in 2014, with the data measured in billion kWh.
Overall
, it is evident that the
electricity
 production was higher than its consumption in every
country
unless
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except
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 for Germany. In terms of the highest
electricity
 usage, China accounted for 5,322
while
 producing 5,398.
This
 number was followed by the United States with 4,099 production and 3,866 consumption.
Whereas
,
Rusia
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Russia
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 as one of the biggest
country
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countries
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 witnessed a significant decline, the
country
 only produced 1,057 and consumed 1,038. Regarding the smallest
electricity
 production, Korea
consituted
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constituted
 at 448.1 with 449.5 energy used. Germany in the second position from the bottom experienced an overload consumption with 582.5
while
 the
country
 only
producing
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 526.6.
Moreover
, Brazil and France had
similar
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a similar
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 situation, they produced 561.2, and 530.7
electricity
 and consumed 462.9 and 455.8,
repspectively
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respectively
. The
remain
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 countries that had
average
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an average
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 number were Canada, India, and Japan.
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