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With the widespread use of the internet , more people choose to work from home . Do the advantages of this trends oughtweigh the disadvantage?

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These days more people choose to work from home. the question is do the advantages overcome the disadvantages? there are a lot of benefits to working remotely one of them is being closer to your family. working 8 hours away from your family can be hard for some,
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, a lot of people like to work in an environment they think is comfortable. and for disadvantage, some companies will prefer their employees to work in an office building to improve their culture and strengthen the company's morale. to illustrate more employees working together every day can
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 with each and form a friendship. in conclusion, today more companies going toward remote working day after day.
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Expand on the reasons why working from home can be beneficial. Provide more examples and personal experiences.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure. Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Develop the conclusion further. Summarize key points and provide a clear stance whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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The essay recognizes both the advantages and disadvantages of working from home.
task achievement
The use of examples such as being close to family and company culture adds practical relevance.

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