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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figure for 2025 and 2050.
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The given table represents the number of population from four different countries in 2003 and projected
statistic
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statistics
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 in 2025 and 2050, indicated in million
peoples
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people
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.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the population figures from Indonesia and
Argentina
 experienced an upward trend,
whereas
 that of
from
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Italy underwent a downward trend.
However
, it is interesting to note that
Republic
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 of
Korea
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Korea's
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populations
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population
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 remain stable throughout the given time frame. In 2003, at 238, Indonesia
has
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had
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 the highest citizens among all nations, followed by, Italy at 54, Korea at 48, and
Argentina
 at 34.
Additionally
, in 2025, Indonesians still outnumbered the other three countries at 274,
while
 there were some changes in the bottom ranking of no more than 52. A
more
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closer look at the table
represent
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shows
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 that
Argentina
 increased
14
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by 14
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peoples
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people
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 which
roughly
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about
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twofolded of the rise in
korea
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Korea
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 with
the
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a
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 rise of 6 million people. In regards
with
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to
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 2050,
Indonesia
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Indonesia's
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populations
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population
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 reached its peak at 312,
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and Italy
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Italy
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Italy's
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 figures show a reverse trend where it
plummet
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plummeted
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 to 45. Surprisingly,
number
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a number
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 of
Argentina
 residents rose dramatically to 62,
the
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and the
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 number of
koreans
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Koreans
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remain
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remains
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 the same as it was in 25-years ago at 52.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words argentina with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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