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Band 7.5

You have lost your student ID Card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student service. Write: Advise them of your situation; Explain how this is affecting you; Request a new card

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to make a request for the replacement of my college ID card which I lost recently at my work and it is causing numerous problems on a daily basis.
This
 incident occurred
last
 week when I was working alone late at night
at
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 the subway. I was busy serving customers when one of the people forcefully entered the cashier area and robbed my wallet and it had all of my credit cards and IDs. The situation is quite distressing. I often go to the library to issue books for my upcoming exams. I lost my college ID and
therefore
, I cannot access the school library without that.
Moreover
, I use public transport and
due to
 discounted transit cards often have to carry my student card with me the validate to the transit security officer that I am a student. I would like to request a temporary replacement card for my lost ID. As it will not only help in enter the library premises but
also
 save me from the heavy fines by transit authorities. Looking forward to your immediate attention to
this
 matter. Yours Faithfully, Saniya Kalsi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear and logical flow of ideas. In some places, the transition between sentences and paragraphs can be improved for better coherence.
task achievement
Review the letter for small grammatical errors and ensure sentence structures are as clear as possible. For example, consider revising 'due to discounted transit cards often have to carry my student card with me the validate' to 'due to discounted transit cards, I often have to carry my student card with me to validate.'
task achievement
The letter effectively conveys the situation and requests a replacement card clearly, addressing all parts of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and professional.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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