The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps compare changes that happened at Happy Valley Mall at 2 various times( 1982 and 2012).

Overall

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, It was important that the vegetation zone was destroyed

while

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this

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place area climbed and a car park was added.

According to

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the pictures, in the beginning, around the shopping centre were planets and a lake

also

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, one road for entrance ;

however

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, the sector of place has increased and built a parking lot for

this

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shop.

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, in the shop centre in 2012, the Toilet, elevator, which is connected to the second floor, entrance, and entertainment area had the same position as in the past. The graphs show Ferniture retail which was in the south-east moved to the place which was lake in 1982;

furthermore

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, the food store, which was in the north, was replaced by it.

Additionally

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, not only sports stores but

also

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electrical stores, which were in the east in 1982, were altered to the north.

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the cafe was destroyed we can see a new Themed restaurant was in the

last

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electrical store.

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Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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