The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line chart illustrates the
amount
of
fish
and three types of meat for each person consumed every week in a country
of
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Europe from 1979 to 2004. In general, there was a significant change
consumption
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of different kinds of meat.
In addition
, having
fish
for meals was always the lowest
amount
in the country. It can be clearly seen that in 1979,
grams
of beef stood at the highest data, nearly 220
grams
. The figures fluctuated before reaching a peak of about 240
grams
in 1983. And after
that
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that,
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it decreased sharply by approximately 110
grams
compared to the first
period
.
Similarly
, the consumption of lamb fell strongly from 150
grams
to around 65
grams
during the
period
. Turning to
the
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chicken and
fish
consumption, at the first of the
period
, people in
the
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European
country
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countries
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have nearly 140
grams
of chicken.
Then
the
amount
chicken’s
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figures continued to rise dramatically and became the highest proportion after the year 1989 to the end of the
period
. Compared to the
amount
of
fish
, the data decreased slightly from around 60
grams
to roughly 40
grams
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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