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The chart below gives information about how people aged 25 - 34 are housed in the UK. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting on the features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how people aged 25 - 34 are housed in the UK. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting on the features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates data on the percentages of individuals aged 25 to 34 who own their homes and those who rent in the UK from 2004 to 2014.
Overall
, British
people
 from
age
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the age
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groups
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group
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 25 to 34
year
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years
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old
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would
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 rather rent than
buying
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buy
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 their own house after 10
years
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year
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 period. Looking at the
home owners
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homeowners
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, most of the
people
 in the initial year
preferred
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preferred to
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 buy a house and it accounted for
at
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apply
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just below two-fifths. In 2007, it experienced a decline
of
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in
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 proportion and
hitting
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 a lower point at
a
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slightly more than two-fifths in 2011 before hovering for two years. In 2014,
a
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slightly more than a third
people
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of people
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owning
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owned
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 a house. Regarding renters, they started at a fifths
then
 steadily
rise
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rose
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 to 41%
people
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of people
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 renting
an
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apply
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accommodation. In the same year as home
owner
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owners
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, renters had an unchanging trend in 2011 and 2012 before reaching a peak point at 48%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeownership
  • renting
  • mortgage
  • down payment
  • property market
  • housing affordability
  • economic downturn
  • government incentives
  • interest rates
  • demographic shift
  • real estate
  • first-time buyers
  • market trends
  • property prices
  • financial stability
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