The pie charts below show the expenditure of the people of a country on different activities in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the expenditure of the people of a country on different activities in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts
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the data on
expenditure
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in an unknown country on a variety of activities in two different years
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2000 and 2010. The unit of measurement is percentage.
Overall
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, travelling and education accounted
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major proportion in terms of
expenditure
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.
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, people spent the least on footwear and clothing. In 2000, the highest
expenditure
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was education a total figure
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34%, followed by travelling which accounted for 25%.
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, in the year 2010, the
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on travelling
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increased by 35%,
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, the money being spent on education was only 20%. The proportion of money spent on health was
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in both
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years with a consistent figure of 15%,
as well as
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the
expenditure
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Restaurants and Hotels
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increased from 16% in 2000 to 17% in 2010.
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, Footwear and clothing were not a major part of the
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, with a 10%
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portion in 2000 and 13% by 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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