The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of female members of parliament in 5 European countries from 2000 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart illustrates the proportion of female parliament members
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five countries in Europe between 2000 and 2012.
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that Germany started
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the highest rates of women
parliament
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in 2000,
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Italy
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by the largest degree in 2012.
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, in 2000 Germany had the highest proportion of female members around 33%, followed by Italy France and Belgium about 27% 25% 27% respectively. The
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of women in
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was merely about 3%. Turning to Germany which had the same patterns of
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from 2000 to 2008 around 35%,
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slowly rose from 2008 to 2012
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37%.
On the other hand
, approximately 25% of members in France’s parliament were women, with a subsequent jump to reach a peak of around 37% in 2004 and a final increase from 30% in 2008 to 32% in 2012. Meanwhile, the figure for Belgium increased from 17% in 2000 to 28% in 2000 and levelled off towards the end of the period.
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