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Some feel it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As some
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Some
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 individuals believe and consider
future
 planning a time-wasting and suggest
to prioritize
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prioritising
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 their thoughts on the present.
What
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I fully agree
and
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 will explain
this
 in
this
 essay. First and foremost,
future
 planning consumes a high amount of psychological energy which prevents us from real-time task accomplishment
due to
 mental tiredness and lack of interest to continue.It's evident that overthinking or overplanning your
future
 will affect horribly on mental health which may lead to several issues
such
 as headaches and mental breakdowns,
additionally
 these symptoms might lead to a
further
 decrease in productivity and creativity in
future
.
Moreover
,
future
 expectations might
put on risk
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affect
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 your physical health as well in various ways which in some conditions is highly unwanted.Several examples can be given but the most popular nowadays is sleep loss which leads to various symptoms
such
 as nose bleeding or dizziness.In some cases, these physical signs might lead to actual diseases
for example
 high blood pressure or sometimes even flu. To summarize,I believe the
future
 goal-making process might lead to physical and psychological disadvantages in
future
 so it is recommended to focus on the present and not put yourself through given risks.
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