The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 ans the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The plans illustrate how Grange

Park

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looks

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looked

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like when it first opened in 1920 and the same

park

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in present.

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, it can be clearly seen that Grange

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has been developed recent century, some

features

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is remained

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but most of

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features

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the features

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are

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removed and

added

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apply

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new

features

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the

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to the

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park

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. To closer look, in 1920, there was

fountain

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a fountain

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in the middle of the

park

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and

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fountain was removed

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nowadays is built rose garden surrounding

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seats. To parallel that, next to the fountain, there was

stage

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the stage

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for musicians and there

was

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two seats for individuals.

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feature was demolished and

amphitheatre

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an amphitheatre

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constructed. In 1920, there was

rose

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a rose

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garden and pond for water plants and these

features

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were

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removed and

cafe

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a cafe

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and children's play area

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built

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apply

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north of

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Grange

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Finally

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present, there

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some new

building

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buildings

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added

the

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to the

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park

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water

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a water

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feature and

entrance

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an entrance

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underground

park

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grammar

Try to improve grammatical accuracy. There are several grammatical mistakes, such as 'some features is remained', which should be 'some features remain.'

vocabulary

Enhance the richness of vocabulary. Some words are repetitively used, such as 'removed' and 'built.' Using synonyms can make the essay more engaging.

structure

Structure your essay more clearly. Use more transitional phrases to improve the flow and coherence of your paragraphs.

task response

You have identified the main changes in the park over time, which is crucial for task response.

structure

Your essay has a clear introduction and a conclusion, which shows a good understanding of essay structure.

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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

152 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

establishment
depiction
key components
walking paths
recreational facilities
modifications
structure
amenities
renovations
installations
expanded areas
reduced areas
changes in vegetation
contemporary needs
implications
community
historical overview
main features
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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 ans the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. do you think is a positive or a negative development?

What impact does the tool have on planning and policy-making for future governments?

Individual greed and selfishness have been the basis of modern society. Some people think that we must return to older more traditional values such as respect for the and the local community in order to create a better world to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? Give reasons for your answer.