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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar graph illustrates the statistics of households estimated in millions from the US
according to
 their yearly earning in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
, it is evident from the graph that
people
 who are earning between the range of 75000 to 99999 dollars always stayed least among other annual incomes.
Firstly
, the US
people
 who are above $100,000 own at least 25
million
 households,
while
people
 earning between the range of $75000 to $99999 were around 15
million
 or less than that in all 3 years. Where
as
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people
 of $100,000 saw a dip of almost 2
million
 in 2011 compared to 29 in 2007, but eventually it
stands
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 out as top again in 2015 reaching almost 33
million
.
On the other hand
, there were unstable in owning households who
earns
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 less than $25000, between $25000 to $49999, and $50000 to $74999. Among the 3-year period,
people
 who earned between $25000 to 49999 always stayed first following less than $25000 and
people
 who earned between $50000 to $74999 when compared among these 3 ranges. In 2011
people
 who earned between $25000 to $49999 was the highest among all 5 ranged salaries and seconding being less than $25000. But
this
 situation changed in 2015 where making citizens with annual income between $25000 to $49999 the
second,
following
third
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 position for annual income less than $25000
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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