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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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These days
people
loves
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 to stay alone so that they can hide from
the
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life it is obviously something worth it to stay alone for a
while
. Some
people
 believe when they take a break by staying far away from
people
 they can leave the stress behind them which can be
a
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true, But
alot
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a lot
 of
people
 live alone for the rest of their lives
i
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 would say to those
people
 it is something negative to do, To clarify the reasons we need to ask them
like
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 the famous magazine has done after studying 100
people
 the statistics say many
people
 prefer to stay alone because back in time when they were children their parents they were. locked them up in their own rooms as a punishment most of their lives and not letting them go with other children and know they think it is best to stay alone and watch a movie. From my point of view, I would say sometimes it
good
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 to live alone so that you can take care of yourself
becuase
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because
 no one will
taking
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 care of you
,
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while
 living with nobody you can rely on yourself.
Moreover
, you will know your real personality and find out who really you are, I could tell from some
people
i
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 know it is
peacful
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peaceful
 to live for a
while
 alone
Nevertheless
people
 are living
their
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. entire life alone god created wife and husband so that they can be together each one of them
need
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 the other. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, living alone could have some benefits
also
 staying with family or
wife
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a wife
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 could have some benefits too, So try to balance between them.
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