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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 2

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 2
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The map illustrates two potential locations (S1 and S2) for a new shopping mall in the city
Brandfield
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of Brandfield
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.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the main difference between
two
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the two
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 sites is that S1 is located on the east
side
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 and S2 on the
west
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side
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 of the map. The sites can
also
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 be compared in terms of access by
road
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,
river
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 or rail, and their positions relative to four areas. Looking at the information in more detail,
housing
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the housing
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 estate
located
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is located
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 on the north
side
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 ,
a
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with a
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golf course and
park
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a park
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 on the
west
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side
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. S1 is close to the city centre, housing estate,
river
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and
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apply
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golf course and park.
However
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, it is far from the railway which
is cross
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crosses
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 the area from the southern east to the northern
west
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.
Also
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, it is far from the
road
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 which forms a circle around the city centre and ends in the northern
west
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. There is a
river
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 from the north to the
southern
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southern-west
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west
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side
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.
It is clear that
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 a
river
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 is far from the S2.
By
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contrast
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contrast,
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 S2 lies on the
road
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 and railway
road
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.
Moreover
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, S2 is near the industrial estate which is located on the
west
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side
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 of the map.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words side, west, road, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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