The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women in Burnby Public Library from 2011 to 2014

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women in Burnby Public Library from 2011 to 2014
The graph compares the
number
of
books
read by
men
and
women
at a public library during a period of 4 years.
Overall
, we can see the
number
of
books
read by
men
saw a
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increase since 2012 and it
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overlooks
overtook
the amount of
book
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books
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read by
women
in 2013. A more detailed look at the graph reveals, in 2011
women
read more
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books
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than
man
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men
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, around 4500
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to 2500. From 2011 until 2012 both figures increased but
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woman
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figure increased with a sharper slope. In 2012
women
read about 8000 which is twice as much as
men
reading. From 2012 to 2013
men
's
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dramatically
while
women
's
figure
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gradually increased, as
the
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result
men
increased
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filled the gap between the line and in 2013 both
men
and
women
read the same
number
of
books
, 10000
books
.
However
, from 2013 to 2014
women
started to read
less
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books
and by 2014
the
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women
read about 6500, which shows
women
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women's
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reading declined
around
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3500 from its peak. The
number
of
books
read by
men
continued increasing and it
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its peak, 14000
books
in 2014.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, books, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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