The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women in Burnby Public Library from 2011 to 2014
The graph compares the
number
of books
read by men
and women
at a public library during a period of 4 years. Overall
, we can see the number
of books
read by men
saw a sigfinicant
increase since 2012 and it Correct your spelling
significant
overtooks
the amount of Correct your spelling
overlooks
overtook
book
read by Fix the agreement mistake
books
women
in 2013.
A more detailed look at the graph reveals, in 2011 women
read more book
than Fix the agreement mistake
books
man
, around 4500 Fix the agreement mistake
men
compare
to 2500. From 2011 until 2012 both figures increased but Change the form of the verb
compared
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the woman
woman
figure increased with a sharper slope. In 2012 Change noun form
woman's
women
read about 8000 which is twice as much as men
reading. From 2012 to 2013 men
's figure
dramatically Fix the agreement mistake
figures
while
women
's figure
gradually increased, as Fix the agreement mistake
figures
the
result Correct article usage
a
men
increased study
filled the gap between the line and in 2013 both Fix the agreement mistake
studies
men
and women
read the same number
of books
, 10000 books
.
However
, from 2013 to 2014 women
started to read less
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fewer
books
and by 2014 the
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apply
women
read about 6500, which shows women
reading declined Change noun form
women's
around
3500 from its peak. The Change preposition
by around
number
of books
read by men
continued increasing and it reaches
its peak, 14000 Wrong verb form
reached
books
in 2014.Submitted by parsaj1381 on
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