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The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the distribution of different income groups in cities and regional centres of Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The previous bar chart showcases the average yearly earnings in percentages in
cities
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 and regional areas around Australia.
Overall
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, the majority of
people
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 in
cities
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 earned a
middle
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salary
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while
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 most of the
people
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 in regional centres had a lower
middle
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 income.
In contrast
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, the least amount of
people
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 in
cities
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 had a low income,
whereas
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 the least proportion of individuals in regional areas got a high
salary
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. In detail, it can be clearly seen that around
cities
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 most
people
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 (around 35%) tended to have a
middle
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salary
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, followed by a lower
middle
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 (around 30%) and a high
salary
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 (around 20%).
However
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, in regional areas the situation was different. The lower
middle
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salary
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 was earned by the majority of the
people
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 (around 34%), followed by a smaller amount of
people
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 earning a
middle
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 and low
salary
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. Contrarily, the least number of
people
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 in
cities
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 (around 13%) got a low
salary
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while
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 around regional centres the high
salary
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 was earned by the lowest number of
people
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 (around 15%).
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cities, people, middle, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 9 times.
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