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Many people try to balance work in other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance?

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tomake
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to make
work
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-
life
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 balance? Nowadays
on
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 of the most discussed topics is trying to manipulate time, so
person
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the person
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 is able to have enough opportunities in
work
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 without leaving
personal
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their personal
his personal
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life
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. The essay describes several
problems
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accosieted
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associated
 with
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 and provides possible solutions
such
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 as setting
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 between professional and daily or prioritizing essential tasks over less vital ones. Today vast majority deal with,
so-called
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,
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work
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work-life
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life
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 balance issue.
This
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 eventually leads to both physical and mental
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.
Possibility
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The possibility
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 of getting into
burnout
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a burnout
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 spiral, when you cannot finish
single
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a single
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 task
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on time
 or even
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 up is higher than
people
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 assume.
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, office workers tackle
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it more often than usual.
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 these
people
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 come to closely related
problems
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, namely health issues or even worse, issues with mental health. Once
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 experiences depression, he or she will see skin
problems
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,
such
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 as acnes and so on.
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The mentioned
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problems
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 are highly interconnected and cannot be ignored.
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, let's discuss possible solutions for not witnessing it. One solution is to set boundaries between
work
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 and
life
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. In
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most
of
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the
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cases, employees need to think about their professional
life
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 even outside of the actual
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-time which forces them which forces them to be only concerned about the other
part
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parts
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 of
life
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 rather than enjoying essential
one
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ones
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. With establishing
solid
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a solid
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 barrier,
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a person
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 faces less anxiety
overall
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.
For
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instance,
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people
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 can avoid checking
work
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 emails outside of working hours.
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 solution
is prioritize
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is to prioritize
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 essential tasks
instead
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 of multitasking. When
people
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 concentrate on what truly matters, they can avoid possible burnout and issues connected to
well being
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.
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instance
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 using
"eating
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the "eating
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 frog first" method when the most complicated task of the day is done in the first place, is
wonderful
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a wonderful
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 way. In conclusion, even though keeping
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a balance
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 between academic and personal
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 is
tough
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a tough
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 question,
people
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ar
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are
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 able to accomplish it by boundary
settings
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setting
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nd
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and
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 prioritizing passions. It is vital to remember that we must
work
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 for
life
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, not live for
work
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.

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Grammatical range and accuracy
Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to avoid minor errors that impact readability.
Task achievement
Provide more specific examples and elaborate on them to strengthen the arguments.
Coherence and cohesion
Clearly separate paragraphs for each point and ensure logical progression from one idea to the next.
Introduction
The introduction sets the context well and provides a clear overview of the essay’s content.
Task achievement
The essay attempts to address both parts of the question, identifying problems and suggesting solutions.
Lexical resource
The use of phrases like 'burnout spiral' and 'eating frog first' shows an attempt to utilize relevant vocabulary and idiomatic expressions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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