Some people belive that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People today live in the digital era, where we can get everything only from a smart device. Some people think printed
books
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are no longer important as all writings can be saved electronically
while
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another group disagrees.
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a
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of
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could have a number of benefits.
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,
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would definitely protect and save our planet, since printed
books
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is
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a collection of
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and paper comes from
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.
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, by not cutting
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, we
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to save
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trees
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and
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also
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.
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, by not
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the
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it would decrease the price of
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. Consumers would buy the
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and can save the budget for the other things. It would make
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of
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as increase as the author’s wealth.
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, from
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perspective, it would make their life easier by
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to bring
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books
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, they just need a device to do anything.
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, there are some
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that still need
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a printed book
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books
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, it is
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feel to read a digital
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printed
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book
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, from my experience,
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,
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became lazier if
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to read a digital
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than
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a printed
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book
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.
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, it is
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because
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eye has a limitation
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a monitor, our
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become weak if looking at the monitor too long.
SO
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, it is healthier to read a printed
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than a digital
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. In
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, I personally believe
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printed
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book
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books
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and
change
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to digital
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book
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books
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to save the earth.
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, the government should find
out
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an alternative source
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of
trees
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to produce
papers
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.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Strengthen coherence by improving the flow between paragraphs and ensure each paragraph builds on the previous one logically.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. For instance, elaborating on how digital books are more environmentally friendly could make the argument stronger.
Language Accuracy
Work on grammar and sentence structure to avoid ambiguity. Improve the use of articles, prepositions, and verb forms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps the reader follow the argument.
Task Achievement
Addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion, which fulfills the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use of linking phrases such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore' aids in the logical flow of ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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