Some people belive that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era as all writings can be stored electronically. Others think that printed books still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
People today live in the digital era, where we can get everything only from a smart device. Some people think printed
books
are no longer important as all writings can be saved electronically while
another group disagrees.
Read
a Wrong verb form
Reading
book
from device
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the device
a device
instead
of papers
could have a number of benefits. Fix the agreement mistake
paper
Firstly
, this
would definitely protect and save our planet, since printed books
is
a collection of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
papers
and paper comes from Fix the agreement mistake
paper
trees
. Therefore
, by not cutting trees
, we involved
Add a missing verb
are involved
to save
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in saving
trees
and earth
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the earth
Rephrase
apply
also
. Secondly
, by not printed
the Change the form of the verb
printing
books
it would decrease the price of books
. Consumers would buy the books
and can save the budget for the other things. It would make sale
of Add an article
the sale
a sale
books
as increase as the author’s wealth. Moreover
, from reader’s
perspective, it would make their life easier by Correct article usage
the reader’s
do
not Verb problem
apply
need
to bring Wrong verb form
needing
a heavy
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a heavy book
heavy books
books
, they just need a device to do anything.
Nevertheless
, there are some argument
that still need Fix the agreement mistake
arguments
a printed
Correct the article-noun agreement
a printed book
printed books
books
. Firstly
, it is different
feel to read a digital Add an article
a different
book
with
Change preposition
from
printed
Add an article
a printed
the printed
book
, from my experience, for instance
, i
became lazier if Change the capitalization
I
i
Change the capitalization
I
have
to read a digital Wrong verb form
had
book
than printed
Add an article
a printed
the printed
book
. Furthermore
, it is possibly
because Change the word
possible
human
eye has a limitation Add an article
the human
to see
a monitor, our Change preposition
in seeing
eye
become weak if looking at the monitor too long. Fix the agreement mistake
eyes
SO
, it is healthier to read a printed Correct your spelling
So
book
than a digital book
.
In Conclusions
, I personally believe Fix the agreement mistake
Conclusion
to remove
printed Change preposition
in removing
book
and Fix the agreement mistake
books
change
to digital Wrong verb form
changing
book
to save the earth. Fix the agreement mistake
books
Therefore
, the government should find out
an alternative source Change preposition
apply
instead
of trees
to produce papers
.Fix the agreement mistake
paper
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Coherence and Cohesion
Strengthen coherence by improving the flow between paragraphs and ensure each paragraph builds on the previous one logically.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples and detailed explanations to support your points. For instance, elaborating on how digital books are more environmentally friendly could make the argument stronger.
Language Accuracy
Work on grammar and sentence structure to avoid ambiguity. Improve the use of articles, prepositions, and verb forms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps the reader follow the argument.
Task Achievement
Addresses both viewpoints and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion, which fulfills the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use of linking phrases such as 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore' aids in the logical flow of ideas.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example