The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram below shows
process
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the process
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of
tea
production using traditional and modern methods.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are 5 different stages, commencing with sorting, where the best quality leaves are selected from all, and ending with drying, using hot
air
dryers.
To begin
with, the process starts
from
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the selection of
tea
leaves, where only bud and 2 top leaves can be picked for
food quality
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tea
. The next step
after
this
is the withering
the
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leaves. In
this
stage,
air
passes through the leaves on the rack, which leads to a loss of 60 per cent of moisture. After that, withered
tea
leaves can go through either
traditional
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the traditional
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method
or
modern
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the modern
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method
. Regarding
traditional
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the traditional
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method
, leaves are rolled and enzymes are released from the leaves. At the same time,
modern
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the modern
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method
uses cutting leaves, torn and
curles
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curled
, creating small granular pieces. Once
tea
leaves go through one of these methods, fermentation happens, causing the leaves to change their
color
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colour
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to copper because of enzymes plus
air
reaction
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reactions
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.
Finally
,
tea
leaves are dried by oven or hot
air
dryers,
loosing
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losing
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97 per cent of total moisture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • plucking
  • withering
  • rolling
  • fermentation
  • drying
  • grading
  • packaging
  • oxidation
  • quality
  • efficiency
  • cost-effectiveness
  • scalability
  • aroma
  • flavor profile
  • sequence of steps
  • equipment
  • methodology
  • production rate
  • comparative analysis
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