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Many people claim that ordering food is a better option than preparing it themselves. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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A good number of individuals approve that consuming ready-to-go
food
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 is better rather than making it at home.
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 essay completely agrees with the given statement as types of choices are likely to be more and it is the best way to save your
time
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. There
are
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is
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 a range of ready-to-go foods to order which
enable
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enables
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 people to have more opportunities to select any kind of
food
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.
Currently
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 as every field is advancing, correspondingly
food
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 sphere is being enhanced in organic chemical additives, allowing cookers to prepare
wider
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a wider
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 number of foods.
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,
this
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 way serves restaurants or cafes with an encouragement to make a variety
types
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of types
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 of meals.
Competition
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The competition
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 that has been
conducting
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 since 2017 in the USA might serve as a primary example, on the grounds that
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 competition is established to show
a
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apply
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diverse foods that dwellers are able to order. Ordering
food
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 is the best option to save
your
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you
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time
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. Doing household chores
require
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requires
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 a great deal of
time
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, especially, cooking.
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, now many people are doing full-
time
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job
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jobs
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 forcing them to order dishes from particular types of cafes or restaurants. To explain it deeper, as
full-
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a full-time
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time
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 job
absorbes
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absorbs
absorbed
time
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 and
also
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 energy , individuals are not able to cook after coming home by being
excausted
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exhausted
.
Thereby
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, ordering
food
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 assists people
to save
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in saving
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 not only their
time
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and
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but
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also
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 their energy.
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, in some full-
time
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 companies, hosts provide their employees with ordered
food
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 to recharge their energy and work tenacity.
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,
this
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 essay strongly agrees with the provided claim as it is helpful to have more
time
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 and to be able to choose a range of dishes

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task achievement
Your essay successfully addresses the task by providing reasons why ordering food can be better than preparing it at home. However, to further strengthen your response, you could consider addressing counterarguments or discussing the negatives of ordering food.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is logically organized with clear paragraphs, there are some awkward phrasings and grammatical errors that slightly disrupt the flow. For example, 'types of choices are likely to be more' should be 'there are likely to be more choices'. Focus on phrasing and grammar for improved clarity.
task achievement
Your essay could benefit from more specific examples or data to support your points. For instance, you mentioned a competition in the USA but did not provide details about it. Providing concrete examples can make your arguments more compelling.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
You have managed to identify and explain two strong reasons supporting the statement that ordering food is better than cooking at home.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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