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The graph below gives information about percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph below gives information about percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
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 living in urban areas in
four
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 Asian
countries
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—namely the Philippines,
Malaysia
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, Thailand, and Indonesia—between 1970 and 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the graph shows a significant upward trend in urbanization across all
four
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countries
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. Notably, Indonesia had the smallest proportion of its
population
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 living in cities in 1970,
while
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Malaysia
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 is expected to have the highest by 2040. In 1970, Indonesia had the lowest urban
population
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 at nearly 15%,
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 the Philippines had the highest at just over 30%. From 1970 to 1990, all
four
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countries
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 experienced increases in urbanization. By 1990,
Malaysia
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’s urban
population
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 had reached around 45%, slightly below the Philippines’ 49%.
However
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, between 1990 and 2000,
Malaysia
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 saw a substantial rise of 17%,
while
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 the proportion in the Philippines declined by 4%. The data
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 predict that from 2020 onward,
Malaysia
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 will surpass the other
countries
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 in urban
population
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 percentage, reaching over 80% by 2040.
In contrast
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, Indonesia’s urban
population
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 will grow steadily, but it will still remain the lowest among the
four
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countries
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 by 2040. By that time, the urban
population
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 of
Malaysia
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 is expected to be almost double that of Thailand and Indonesia.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, four, malaysia, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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