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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart demonstrates the
number
 of
people
 engaging in distinct activities at a social
center
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centre
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 in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020. Generally, the film club was the most popular activity,
whereas
 musical shows were the least
favorable
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 attention from the community in the city over the period shown.
Nonetheless
, the latter experienced the fastest growth rate in the
number
 of attendance. From 2000 to 2020, the movie club had the highest
number
 of
participants
, which fluctuated around 65
people
.
Similarly
, the figure for martial arts was relatively stable, waving about 35
people
. Regarding amateur dramatics, the
number
 of
participants
 started at nearly 25
people
 in 2000 and it grew by 5
people
 in the next 5 years. Since
then
, the figure dropped constantly and reached under 10
people
 in 2020. Over the course of 5 years, starting from 2000, the
number
 of
participants
 in table tennis activity was about 25.
Then
, it decreased slightly by 5
people
 in 2010.
Nevertheless
, it rose considerably in 2015 and peaked at over 50
people
 in 2020. Noticeably, there was no data for musical shows between 2000 and 2005.
However
, starting in 2005,
this
 activity welcomed the first
participants
. In the following five years, it had about 10
people
 and kept growing to 15
people
 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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