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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart demonstrates the
number
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 of
people
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 engaging in distinct activities at a social
center
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centre
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 in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020. Generally, the film club was the most popular activity,
whereas
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 musical shows were the least
favorable
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 attention from the community in the city over the period shown.
Nonetheless
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, the latter experienced the fastest growth rate in the
number
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 of attendance. From 2000 to 2020, the movie club had the highest
number
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 of
participants
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, which fluctuated around 65
people
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.
Similarly
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, the figure for martial arts was relatively stable, waving about 35
people
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. Regarding amateur dramatics, the
number
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 of
participants
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 started at nearly 25
people
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 in 2000 and it grew by 5
people
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 in the next 5 years. Since
then
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, the figure dropped constantly and reached under 10
people
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 in 2020. Over the course of 5 years, starting from 2000, the
number
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 of
participants
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 in table tennis activity was about 25.
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, it decreased slightly by 5
people
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 in 2010.
Nevertheless
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, it rose considerably in 2015 and peaked at over 50
people
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 in 2020. Noticeably, there was no data for musical shows between 2000 and 2005.
However
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, starting in 2005,
this
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 activity welcomed the first
participants
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. In the following five years, it had about 10
people
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 and kept growing to 15
people
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 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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