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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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 of present health expenses of gross domestic product for 12 countries in Europe for 2002, 2007 and 2012. From the bar chart
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 the figure stayed fixed in four nations, for three respective years, which are Belgium, Estonia, Spain, and Switzerland,
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 the remaining countries had fluctuation.
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, followed by Belgium with 10
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 Spain ranked third highest
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. Their numbers all remained static for three respective years.
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, the number fluctuated in the rest of nations. It is interesting to note that Denmark, Lithuania, Norway, Poland and Slovenia, their number all peaked in 2012, at 10 %, 6%, 10 %, 7% and 9 %, respectively.
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, their numbers all stayed unchanged in the year 2007 and 2002, with 9
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • - Current health expenditure: The amount of money spent on healthcare services and products at present.
  • - Percentage of GDP: The proportion of the Gross Domestic Product (the total value of goods and services produced in a country) allocated to health expenditure.
  • - Main features: The most important characteristics or aspects.
  • - Overall: In general; considering everything.
  • - Surpassed: Exceeded; went beyond.
  • - Decline: A decrease or reduction.
  • - Fluctuation: An irregular rise and fall; variation.
  • - Comparisons: The act of examining similarities and differences between two or more things.
  • - Largest increase: The greatest growth or rise.
  • - Most fluctuation: The highest degree of variation or instability.
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