Earlier technology development brought more changes to life of ordinary people than the recent technology development do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The scientific innovations that
occured
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occurred
long
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a long
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time ago had more
values
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value
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than the
one
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ones
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being invented now. In my
opinion
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this
statement is true, because those
inventions
had more appliances in day-to-day life, and
inventions
happening now are making
people
ambitious
unnecssarily
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unnecessarily
. During the early ages,
people
did not have any kind of facilities
making
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their life easier, which enabled
to
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them to
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make
such
inventions
more essential in their lives. They were under huge pressure
of living
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their life without any conveniences as nothing like the phone, aeroplane,
machines
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or machines
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,
nevertheless
,later development of
such
invention
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inventions
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definitely eased their regular lives.
For example
, globalisation was not even thought about, before
scientist
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scientists
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invented
aeroplane
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the aeroplane
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, by which
people
and goods could be exported and imported, which now is enabling
people
to consume it from different parts of the world. Another reason to
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with the statement is the type of
inventions
they are making now. Different countries have started making different
kind
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kinds
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of weapons including the
atom
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bomb which can destroy the beautiful world in
few
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a few
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seconds. Another innovation they discovered is AI which will soon disregard the value of
human
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humans
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. Those
kind
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of
inventions
are only putting the world in danger which can destroy
this
earth in the near future.
Lets
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take the Palestine war,
for example
, where
everyday
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many
people
are dying
as a result
of
the
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destructive
inventions
like
misaels
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missiles
and bombs. In conclusion, the value of recent
inventions
are
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not as admired as before, because
people
can live without these recent
inventions
unlike before, and the weapons produced
as a result
of those research are
distructive
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destructive
for
this
earth.
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