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Two opinions exist about the public transportation’s development. The first one tells that governments should invest mainly in its speed, the second one – in other priorities
such
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 cost and the environment. It is necessary to find the right way using
broad
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 mind. First of all, the velocity of transport is
essential
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important
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factor in big cities,
metropolises
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and metropolises
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.
For instance
, in Moscow, the length of underground lines comes to 70
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.
Therefore
, the quickness of the trains and layovers has a significant value to the time
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 on the route. Another point of importance is the timetable of the buses, trams and usual trains. If you should change the kind of
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transport more than once per your trip, you would pay attention to intervals between two departures. In Samara,
for example
, you can
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 your underground train
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 10 minutes. It is interesting to compare
this
 time to 90 seconds in Moscow.
However
, the metro is not so popular in Samara. On
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, there are other significant points in
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 of
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 transportation system. The cost, the conservation of the environment,
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 comfort
also
 have a great meaning for the passengers. The governments should constrain the growth of prices and think about
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their
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 citizens.
According to
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 goal, a lot of European countries use
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electric buses to prevent the pollution of the air in the cities. In my opinion, the governments should be attentive to passengers and citizens all in all. The great transportation
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 on modern tendencies of countries’ development and opinions of users and operators
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introduction conclusion present
The introduction could be more elaborate. Provide a clearer thesis statement that outlines your position on the issue at hand.
logical structure
Some parts of the essay lack smooth transitions between ideas. Use more transitional phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' and 'Furthermore' to connect your points more effectively.
relevant specific examples
Enhance your examples by making them more specific and relevant. Rather than simply stating that the metro is not so popular in Samara, explain the implications and reasons for this.
introduction conclusion present
Try to develop your conclusion further. Summarize the main points discussed and restate your overall opinion, possibly suggesting a balanced approach to the issue.
relevant specific examples
The essay demonstrates a satisfactory grasp of the topic and provides relevant examples to illustrate points, such as the comparison between Moscow and Samara's metro systems.
supported main points
Your argument is well-supported with logical reasoning. The examples provided do align with your main points and bolster the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informative
  • engages
  • creative
  • art form
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • misleading
  • exaggerating
  • vulnerable
  • unrealistic
  • body image expectations
  • competitive
  • economical
  • targeted ads
  • personalized ads
  • intrusive
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