The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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This

is the map of a

town

by the name of Garlsdon.

This

map shows the two possible places where a supermarket can be created. The first

place

is in the countryside area which is a little far away from houses and the

town

centre.

However

, the

second

place

is in the

town

centre surrounded by industrial areas

also

there is a railway nearby. The first

place

is 12 km far away from Hindon where the population is 10,000

also

it is very away from the houses of people.

In addition

, there is a main road and a railway track that covers

this

site.

On the other hand

, the

second

site is surrounded by an industrial area.It is near the area where there are many homes. It is very close to Bransdon which is only 16 km and 15000 people live there.

whereas

Cransdon

town

is 25 km away with a population of 29000.The

second

site where

this

store is being planned is located in no traffic zone because it is a city centre.People can easily approach

this

second

place

because it is closer to society.

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Environmental impact
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Green space
Job creation
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Traffic patterns
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