The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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exportation of pineapples from the three countries in two different years whilst the pie chart demonstrates various categories of the distribution of the amount made from each of the fruits to the consumer.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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country
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B used to sell the highest quantity of the products in the year 2009
however
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country
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A improved significantly after a decade
whereas
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country
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C remained almost steady in comparison to the former countries.
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, it is seen that the highest proportion of the
cost
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was accounted
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distribution and retail and the export costs
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very little if compared to it. To elaborate more from the bar graph, in the
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period of time,
country
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B was at the top,being higher by almost 3 million metric
tonnes
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than
country
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A which was about
1.5million
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1.5 million
metric
tonnes
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and
country
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C was even less than that.After ten years,
country
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A rose
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its
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sales by nearly
9million
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9 million
metric
tonnes
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whereas
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country
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B dropped by roughly
3million
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3 million
metric
tonnes
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. As compared to these,
country
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C had little or no change at all. As per the information from the second graph, the highest proportion of money which was as high as 35% , went to distribution and retail.
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price was
7times
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7 times
greater
to
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that of the producer
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the export
cost
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was only 4%. As compared to the export
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, the international transport and the taxes were
3times
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3 times
and 4
times
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more respectively.
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, the import licenses
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double
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that of the producer and the profit was 18%, which was nearly four
times
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the production.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words country, cost, tonnes, times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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