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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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 in school varies from one to another.
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 is more effective, others find working on their own
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 better way. In
this
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 at the same time. Obviously, when something is done by several
people
, it is done better, because of different ideas and views born during brainstorming. Doing so, it is easier to come to one alternative idea with consideration of everyone's opinion.
Additionally
, students can turn
this
 task into something interesting, playing some games during breaks,
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will find projects as something amusing, rather than complicated or boring activity.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
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, who can not work with a lot of
people
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therefore
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 any tasks successfully alone. Indeed, doing projects independently is extremely
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convenient
 and beneficial, as nobody distracts from work, helping to concentrate on it, and school children can learn more when doing self research on topics.
To sum up
, despite different conditions, like being with
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 or alone, students can either gain more information or be entertained.
That is
 why I believe in
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 sides of
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group work
, which creates
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 atmosphere and
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 many insights.
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The essay provides a clear outline of both viewpoints on the topic, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
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