Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams.

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quick increase in car owners causing traffic jams in urban areas. There are various reason which perfectly stands
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is that people buy a car to showcase their financial status in society. There are multiple reasons I can describe but the main reason that
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high impact on the environment, which
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carbon dioxide, causes noise pollution and air pollution.
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, humans residing in these cities frequently have problems like
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should promote their public services like underground trains and buses
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people.
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should encourage their
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to travel with
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where
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employee can pick
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other employees from
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which may
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jams. In
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of cars
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rising and can affect the future generation but on the other
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coherence
You should focus on structuring your arguments more logically and coherently. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea that is backed up with appropriate examples and analysis.
task response
Although your essay addresses the task, it would benefit from more specific examples to support your points. Illustrate your arguments with relevant, detailed examples.
language
Work on improving your grammar and vocabulary to ensure your ideas are clearly communicated. Proofreading your work for common mistakes will help with clarity.
overall structure
Your introduction sets a clear context for the problem, and your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points.
task response
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for increased car ownership and possible solutions to the issue of traffic jams.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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