More and more people are moving from rural areas to live in cities. What problems can this cause? How can these problems be solved?
In our days a lot of
people
prefer living in cities than
living in Change preposition
to
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the country
country side
. Because urban areas Correct your spelling
countryside
ofer
more opportunities for living, Correct your spelling
offer
such
as jobs and education, more villages have been left by teen
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teenage
people
.
Relocation from countryside
to Add an article
the countryside
urban
side Correct article usage
the urban
cause
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causes
same
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the same
problems
. One of main
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the main
problems
is that the villages become abandoned, all youth people
are gone for education or work and there stays
only elderly Change the verb form
stay
people
that cannot go anywhere. Furthermore
cities are overpopulated, rental prices Add a comma
Furthermore,
go
up and is increasing homelessness. Wrong verb form
are going
Additionally
transport system became agglomerated that
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apply
cause
a lot of traffic Wrong verb form
causing
problems
and overloaded transport. Also
healthcare system suffer
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suffers
of
a large number of Change preposition
from
people
that
need help. Correct pronoun usage
who
For instance
, all teenagers goes
to study in Chişinău and after finishing their studies they stay here Change the verb form
go
for living
causing overpopulation.
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to live
For
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To
solution
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solve
this
problem guvernaments
can create living conditions in all Correct your spelling
governments
country
to reduce Fix the agreement mistake
countries
this
migration. By investing in infrastructure, such
as affordable housing and efficient public transport, cities can better accommodate a growing population. Moreover
, rural development initiatives such
as creating local job opportunities and improving educational facilities can make rural areas more attractive, reducing the need for people
to migrate. For example
, in China, investments in rural regions have been successful in reducing rural to urban
migration pressures.
In Add a hyphen
rural-to-urban
conclusion
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conclusion,
while
migration to urban areas can cause lots of problems
, exist solution
to Fix the agreement mistake
solutions
this
challenges. Effective urban planning and efforts to make rural living more viable can help to a better quality of life for all residents.Correct determiner usage
these
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