More and more people are moving from rural areas to live in cities. What problems can this cause? How can these problems be solved?

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In our days a lot of
people
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prefer living in cities
than
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living in
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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. Because urban areas
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offer
more opportunities for living,
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as jobs and education, more villages have been left  by
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people
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.    Relocation from
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the countryside
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to
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the urban
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same
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problems
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. One of
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problems
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is that the villages become abandoned, all youth
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are gone for education or work and there
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only elderly
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that cannot go anywhere.
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Furthermore
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cities are overpopulated, rental prices
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up and is increasing homelessness.
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transport system became agglomerated
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cause
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a lot of traffic
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and overloaded transport.
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healthcare system
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of
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a large number of
people
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that
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need help.
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, all teenagers
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to study in Chişinău and after finishing their studies they stay here
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to live
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causing overpopulation.  
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solution
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this
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problem
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governments
can create living conditions in all
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to reduce
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migration. By investing in infrastructure,
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as affordable housing and efficient public transport, cities can better accommodate a growing population.
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, rural development initiatives
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as creating local job opportunities and improving educational facilities can make rural areas more attractive, reducing the need for
people
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to migrate.
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, in China, investments in rural regions have been successful in reducing
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migration pressures.    In
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while
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migration to urban areas can cause lots of
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, exist
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to
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challenges. Effective urban planning and efforts to make rural living more viable can help to a better quality of life for all residents.
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