Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, many
people
would like to eat
food
at a
hotel
rather than preparing at
home
. I would like to prepare and eat
meal
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meals
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at
home
as it saves money, is healthy and clean. I have several reasons why I choose to make and eat
food
at
home
.
Firstly
,
food
made at
home
are
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is
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healthy, which helps to reduce the risk of some chronic diseases
such
as diabetes, and hypertension.
For instance
,
people
who usually eat at
restaurant
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restaurants
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may not know how the
food
was prepared and the number of oils or
fat
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fats
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used to make the
food
. A recent study in
USA
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the USA
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demonstrated that
people
who ate their lunch three times a week in a
hotel
or other shopping
center
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centre
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are more likely to develop cardiovascular disease compared to
people
who make their
food
at
home
. The authors postulated that most
people
cooked at hotels have a high content of unsaturated fatty acid, which can increase the risk of heart and blood diseases.
Secondly
, when
people
make
food
at
home
, they are more likely to wash their hands and cooking materials.
Furthermore
, they may use antiseptic solutions to clean their kitchen,
that
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which
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kills bacteria around the cooking area.
For example
, most busy hotels might not use various cleaning materials in the kitchen in order to reduce the risk of infections.
Finally
, preparing
food
at
home
is
cost effective
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.
People
can prepare
food
at their place with a few
ingredient
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ingredients
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that can be obtained from their gardens or shopping
centre
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centres
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. When
people
it at a
hotel
, they are paying not only for the
food
but for the service they have been offered.
Therefore
, it is not economical. The only advantage when
people
eat in a
hotel
is they can save their time.
However
, they might not get a good balanced diet and healthy
food
as
home
cooked
one
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ones
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. In conclusion,
while
eating at
restaurant
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a restaurant
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saves time for busy
people
, I would like to cook
food
at
home
because it is healthy, clean and economical.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction sets the stage more clearly and succinctly for your arguments. Also, work on paragraph transitions to improve the overall flow.
task achievement
Incorporate a wider range of specific examples and evidence for each point you make. Additionally, clarify your points with more detailed reasoning to strengthen your argument.
task response
The essay clearly states a preference and provides multiple reasons for that preference.
coherence cohesion
There is a smooth progression of ideas with each paragraph logically supporting the main argument.
task response
The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points and restates the author's preference.

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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Hygiene
  • Variety
  • Quality control
  • Dietary preferences
  • Social atmosphere
  • Routine
  • Intimate
  • Economical
  • Culinary skills
  • Creativity
  • Inspiration
  • Experience
  • Bonding
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