Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, many
people
would like to eat food
at a hotel
rather than preparing at home
. I would like to prepare and eat meal
at Fix the agreement mistake
meals
home
as it saves money, is healthy and clean.
I have several reasons why I choose to make and eat food
at home
. Firstly
, food
made at home
are
healthy, which helps to reduce the risk of some chronic diseases Change the verb form
is
such
as diabetes, and hypertension. For instance
, people
who usually eat at restaurant
may not know how the Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
food
was prepared and the number of oils or fat
used to make the Fix the agreement mistake
fats
food
. A recent study in USA
demonstrated that Correct article usage
the USA
people
who ate their lunch three times a week in a hotel
or other shopping center
are more likely to develop cardiovascular disease compared to Change the spelling
centre
people
who make their food
at home
. The authors postulated that most people
cooked at hotels have a high content of unsaturated fatty acid, which can increase the risk of heart and blood diseases. Secondly
, when people
make food
at home
, they are more likely to wash their hands and cooking materials. Furthermore
, they may use antiseptic solutions to clean their kitchen, that
kills bacteria around the cooking area. Correct pronoun usage
which
For example
, most busy hotels might not use various cleaning materials in the kitchen in order to reduce the risk of infections. Finally
, preparing food
at home
is cost effective
. Add a hyphen
cost-effective
People
can prepare food
at their place with a few ingredient
that can be obtained from their gardens or shopping Change to a plural noun
ingredients
centre
. When Fix the agreement mistake
centres
people
it at a hotel
, they are paying not only for the food
but for the service they have been offered. Therefore
, it is not economical. The only advantage when people
eat in a hotel
is they can save their time. However
, they might not get a good balanced diet and healthy food
as home
cooked one
.
In conclusion, Correct pronoun usage
ones
while
eating at restaurant
saves time for busy Correct article usage
a restaurant
people
, I would like to cook food
at home
because it is healthy, clean and economical.Submitted by ttesfalove on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction sets the stage more clearly and succinctly for your arguments. Also, work on paragraph transitions to improve the overall flow.
task achievement
Incorporate a wider range of specific examples and evidence for each point you make. Additionally, clarify your points with more detailed reasoning to strengthen your argument.
task response
The essay clearly states a preference and provides multiple reasons for that preference.
coherence cohesion
There is a smooth progression of ideas with each paragraph logically supporting the main argument.
task response
The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points and restates the author's preference.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion