The best way to solve the world's enviromental prolem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Currently, we all
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observed
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of
gas
which aids
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environmental issues. Many people argue that
this
could be
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effective way as it benefits in limited use of motor cars and helps in protecting
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.
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would
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prove that
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in
price
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the price
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of
gas
is
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in many
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science
.
Firstly
, In support
to
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the statement, there is
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continous
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continuous
rise in carbon and other harmful gases in
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which are released
from
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the
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automotive gadgets
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appected
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appeared
appreciated
affected
the
earth
's
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ozone
protective layer,
thus
, the current more useage of
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the vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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have impacted a lot by releasing them.
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,
according to
the recent
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showed
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in newspapers there has been
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% increment in the sales of four-wheel vehicles.
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means people are getting more adaptive to personal
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, and it has become everyone's need.
Therefore
to balance the environmental issues and put
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in
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unnecessary
useage
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use
of personal vehicles
this
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is the best step taken by
government
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the government
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.
Secondly
, the excretion of
tones
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of fossil fuel from
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core is now
at
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its
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verge
to finish
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,
also
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are
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only some named
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countries
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like Saudi arab and the South East Asian countries
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export to
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the majority
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of the nations all around the world.
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, to cover all the
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expenses
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the
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rise in
price
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the price
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of
gas
in
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necessary.
Moreover
,
this
would result
into
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prevention
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of land, as there would be less digging and minimal damage to
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surface.
However
,
this
would be
dificult
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difficult
for normal
man
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men
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to pay for
gas
,
though
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as per
there
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necessity and everyday travel to
there
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workplace. So,
increase
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in
rate
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can be not
stoped
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but can put
limit
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a limit
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on it. In conclusion,
Increase
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in
rate
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the rate
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of petrol is the best way for
envirnment
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environment
environmental
protection as there would be less carbon emission and minimal digging to the
earth
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earth's
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surface to prevent natural calamities ,
also
, there would be more promotion of public vehicles to travel
short
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a short
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distance
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grammar
Improve the grammatical accuracy in the essay. Errors such as 'we all has observed' and 'vehicle have impacted' should be avoided. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage.
clarity
Enhance the clarity of ideas by providing more structured and focused topic sentences for each paragraph. For example, 'Firstly, the continuous rise in carbon and other harmful gases...' can be made clearer as 'First, the rise in harmful gases due to vehicle emissions has significant environmental impacts.'
style
Use a wider range of sentence structures and vocabulary to convey points more effectively and to keep the reader engaged.
perspective
The essay acknowledges multiple perspectives, such as the environmental benefits and economic considerations of increasing fuel prices.
structure
The introduction and conclusion are present, establishing a framework for the essay topic and summarizing the main points.

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