The chart and table below give information about healtheare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
The graphs illustrate the data about healthcare resources and
life
expectancy
in various overseas: Australia, Canada, Germany, Japan
, Netherlands, Spain, United
Kingdom, and Correct article usage
the United
United
States.
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the United
Overall
, Japan
has the highest number of hospital beds
, but spending
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spends
least
money on healthcare. As Correct article usage
the least
the
result, Correct article usage
a
Japan
also
has the longest average life
expectancy
. On the other hands
, the new Fix the agreement mistake
hand
would
country is the lowest point in Correct your spelling
world
bar
graph, and spending money on health the most.
In Add an article
a bar
the bar
bar
chart, Add an article
a bar
the bar
illustration
of the number of hospital Correct article usage
an illustration
beds
per thousand of population
, Correct article usage
the population
Japan
is at the peak of the chart (14 beds
). While
, Canada, Spain, USA
, Correct article usage
the USA
US
, and Australia are at Correct article usage
the US
the
similar point (approximately 3 to 4 Correct article usage
a
beds
). Moreover
, Germany is in the second rank, comparing
to others, at 8 Wrong verb form
compared
beds
.
In the table, showing the amount of government health spending and average life
expectancy
, Japan
government spend the least money on population Change noun form
Japan's
heal
per person (2,581 dollars) and has the longest average Correct your spelling
health
life
(83 years old). While
,
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apply
US
spending the most at 6,719 dollars) and has the shortest average Correct article usage
the US
life
(78 years old). In addition
, Netherlands spending is in the second rank at 3,481 dollars) and the average life
expectancy
is 80 years old, comparing
to Wrong verb form
compared
others country
.Fix the agreement mistake
other countries
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