The chart below shows the amount of time that 10 – 15-year-olds spend chatting on the Internet and playing on games consoles on an average school day in the UK.
The bar graph depicts the data
of
how much time Change preposition
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students
(10 to 15 years old) spend on online communication and computer games
everyday
in Replace the word
every day
the
Britain.
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Overall
, all students
share similar
proportion with regard to chatting on the Internet, Correct article usage
a similar
while
most boys spend playing games
over 4 hours
.
It is noticeable that the figures for all students
chatting online and playing games
both
are equal around Correct pronoun usage
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to
25% and 30% respectively. Girls spend more time Change preposition
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on
chatting on the Internet, with nearly 35% of them taking from 1 to 3 Change preposition
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hours
, and 9% of them over 4 hours
. The ratio of boys who consume 1 to 3 hours
on
chatting is as same as those who spend less than an hour. Change preposition
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Moreover
, less
of them prefer talking online over 4 Correct quantifier usage
fewer
hours
.
When it comes to playing games
, over half of boys spend over 1 hours
on Change to a singular noun
hour
computer
, especially over 10% of them spend over 4 Add an article
the computer
a computer
hours
. Conversely
, only a tiny group of girls are likely to spend over 4 hours
on it, whereas
nearly 40% female
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of female
students
play games
console less than an hour.Submitted by xeyojnn on
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