In this technological era, personal information is stored on computers by many companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In

this

contemporary era,

companies

and organisations use computers to store personal

information

.

Following

this

procedure has its own benefits and cons.

This

essay intends to discuss their pros and cons. I believe

disadvantages

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the disadvantages

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outruns

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the advantages present in

this

storing process.

Firstly

, the main advantage of storing personal

information

helps the organization and

companies

to build up a product

which is

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that

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would be helpful for

the

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apply

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people because personal

information

includes details like health history, interests, family background etcetera. Utilizing

this

information

to generate new business statements to

giving

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it to

the

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society helps in the building

nation

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economy.

In contrast

, allowing

companies

to store personal

information

causes issues and leads to

vulnerability

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the vulnerability

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of the individuals. And

data

security for that enormous

data

is critical.

Any one

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Anyone

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with admin access

are

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is

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allowed to get

those

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that

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data

.

For instance

,

such

data

can be theft by hackers for

a

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apply

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monetary gain,

companies

can

handover

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hand over

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to inappropriate hands for

a

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money.

This

data

can be utilized to blackmail targeted

individual

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individuals

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,

threat

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threaten

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their

life

, or use

this

information

to

infiltered

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infiltrate

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individual

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individuals

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life

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lives

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which might lead

unexpected

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to unexpected

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ending

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endings

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to their

life

. I believe

,

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apply

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the consequences of storing personal

information

in the company can

dangerous

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be dangerous

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and disadvantageous.

For instance

, movie ticket counters in the mall collect

customers

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customers'

customer's

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phone

number

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numbers

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as part of the process

in

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of

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booking a ticket for the cinema.

Following

this

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this,

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the collected team can sell

this

data

to the calling centres where they use it for marketing

purpose

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purposes

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like insurance, bank loans, and credit card offers. Since the phone number is linked with

bank

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the bank

a bank

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, they can easily fetch the details of the particular

individuals

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individual's

individuals'

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credit report and call them continuously about the offers.

To conclude

,

although

giving personal details to the company might help people in some or the other way,

but

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the

data

vulnerability can bring

person’s

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a person’s

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life

to danger.

Hence

I believe,

disadvantages

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the disadvantages

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outweighs

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advantages

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the advantages

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.