A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves •Say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her •Explain how to apply for the job

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Dear Vineeth, I hope
this
letter finds you in good
health
. I got your letter in connection with your job hunting process and am glad you remembered me during
this
time. As you know, recently Kerala was hit by a natural calamity which took away the
life
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of hundreds of people. They lost everything and are in a completely hopeless life situation. The government of Kerala had identified the importance of providing mental
health
support for these people and as an initiating
step
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they addressed all mental
health
workers and practitioners to render their service to help these people. There are a lot of job vacancies open right now. I saw a posting in yesterday's
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where they are calling for international Mental
health
counsellors , especially those with profound English language communication skills to take care of
english speaking
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English-speaking
tourists which trapped in
this
situation. I firmly believe that
this
position is a great fit for your career in which you have extensive experience and knowledge in
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and disaster management sector. The application process for
this
position can be done by two methods, either by online submission of your resume and cover letter or by sending an application through the post. The first option will be the best way for you and the website address for applying is www.disastermanagement.kerala.org. You can see the job application section in the Carrier tab. Please feel free to contact me, if you have any doubt. Best Wishes, LAYA
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task achievement
While your task response is strong, consider adding a bit more specific details about the job role to show a deeper understanding.
coherence cohesion
Although the paragraphs are logically structured, ensure each paragraph introduces a single main idea to enhance clarity.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are very warm and appropriate, making your letter quite engaging.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is friendly and supportive, perfectly matching the context of writing to a close friend.
logical structure
The overall logical structure of the letter is clear and well-organized, guiding the reader smoothly through the content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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