The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
The graph below
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illustrates
illustrastes
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illustrates
the changes made over time in the share of
vehical
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vehicle
registrations
in the US of the three most common types of
commercials vehicle
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commercial vehicles
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between 1970 and 2010 In the year 1970, The
registrations
for taxis and buses showed an increase
whereas
the
registrations
of
trucks
showed a decrease. After a decade, in the year 1980,
in contrast
to 1970, the
numbers
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of
trucks
registered showed a sudden incline
while
the other two types of
vehicle
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vehicles
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showed a decline. The
number
of
trucks
getting
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registered each year
were
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constant from 1980 to 1990
while
the other two still declined. The
number
of
trucks
kept on increasing till 2010 but ended at 45%
while
the percentage of
registrations
for
trucks
in 1970 was 49%. From 2000-2010 the
number
of
registrations
for taxis showed a significant increase and ended at 35% in 2010 which is 10 percentage points more than when it started. The
number
of
registrations
for buses showed a constant decline till 2010 and ended at 3% which is 2 less than the percentage points it started with.
To conclude
, the only vehicle that increased in
registrations
over the period of 4 decades were taxis
while
the other two decreased.
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