The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The bar charts show the
percentage
of the
population
in the UK in 2002, 2006 and 2010 who consumed the daily recommended
amount
of fruit and vegetables. It is evident that each year
women
had the highest
percentage
of the
population
who consumed the recommended daily
amount
followed by
men
and
children
. In 2002,
Women
had the largest
population
of people who consumed the daily recommended
amount
of fruit and vegetables at 25% followed by
men
at 22% and
lastly
by
children
at only 11%. All three categories showed a significant increase in 2006 with
women
who showed an increase of 7
percentage
points
at 32%
while
men
showed an increase of 6
percentage
points
at 28% followed by
children
at 16%. Things took a drastic turn in 2010
,
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when all three categories fell by a lot
while
the
population
of people who ate the advised daily
amount
of fruits and veggies were still higher than that in 2002.
Women
contributed the most with 27% followed by
men
who were 3
percentage
points
behind
women
at 24%
whereas
only 14% of the
children
consumed the daily
amount
advised. In comparison to these values from 2002,
It is clear that
the
population
of both
men
and
women
eating the daily advised
amount
of fruits and vegetables have increased by 2
percentage
points
while
the
population
of
children
eating the advised
amount
has increased by 3
percentage
points
.
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