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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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The bar charts show the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 in the UK in 2002, 2006 and 2010 who consumed the daily recommended
amount
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 of fruit and vegetables. It is evident that each year
women
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of the
population
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 who consumed the recommended daily
amount
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 followed by
men
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 and
children
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. In 2002,
Women
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 had the largest
population
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 of people who consumed the daily recommended
amount
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 of fruit and vegetables at 25% followed by
men
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 at 22% and
lastly
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 by
children
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 at only 11%. All three categories showed a significant increase in 2006 with
women
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 who showed an increase of 7
percentage
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points
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 at 32%
while
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men
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 showed an increase of 6
percentage
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points
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 at 28% followed by
children
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 at 16%. Things took a drastic turn in 2010
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 when all three categories fell by a lot
while
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 the
population
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 of people who ate the advised daily
amount
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 of fruits and veggies were still higher than that in 2002.
Women
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 contributed the most with 27% followed by
men
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 who were 3
percentage
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points
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 behind
women
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 at 24%
whereas
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 only 14% of the
children
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 consumed the daily
amount
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 advised. In comparison to these values from 2002,
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 the
population
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 of both
men
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 and
women
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 eating the daily advised
amount
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 of fruits and vegetables have increased by 2
percentage
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points
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while
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 the
population
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 of
children
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 eating the advised
amount
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 has increased by 3
percentage
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points
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, amount, women, men, children, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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