Your grandparents are planning a family gathering. They want to have a fun weekend somewhere. You know a perfect place to have the event. Write them an email and include the following things: • Tell them about the place you have in mind. • Talk about your experiences at the place. • Describe what the family can do there

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Dear

Grandpaa

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Grandpa

, How are you? I hope you are doing well. How's grandmaa? Tell her that I

am missing

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her so much. I just came to know about the family

gatherning

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gathering

gatherings

for Dad, that you and

grandmaa

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grandma

grandmas

are planning for next week. I am writing

this

email to suggest

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perfact

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perfect

place for get together, if you can consider it. Actually,

last

month, I went to my school picnic. It was held in the National

Park

Brampton.

This

very

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beautiful place to hang out

this

your loved

once

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ones

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These

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park

has

different

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different

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section

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for each age

group

. There are so many rides for rides and

water

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park

also

open on sunny days with all the safety guidelines. Adults can enjoy both indoor and outdoor games like tennis,

bedminton

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badminton

, basketball and many more. For old age people, there is one community

group

which

organize

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joga sessions. I spent

such

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amazing day there, with all my friends. We took so many rides and you know how much

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love to

playing

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with water. I

enjoyed

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around three hours in that

park

. We had

such

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amazing buffet in the lunch. I think you can consider

this

place for gathering. Even the entry fee for family or

group

is affordable. For one

group

fee

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is only 100 $ which includes all three meals with some refreshment drinks. I hope I will soo you soon on

family

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trip. Your loving, Arshdeep

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grammar

Focus on proofreading your essay to correct small grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement and spelling mistakes. For example, 'get together' should be 'gathering together' and 'i' should be 'I.'

content

Try to provide more descriptive details about the specific activities that each family member might enjoy to increase the richness of your response. Describe what each section of the park includes, and perhaps even mention the atmosphere or unique features of the park that make it stand out.

task achievement

The essay addresses all parts of the task effectively, providing a clear response to the prompt by suggesting a suitable place for the family gathering and elaborating on it.

coherence and cohesion

The structure of the email is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, allowing the reader to easily follow your thoughts.

task achievement

You provided relevant personal experiences and specific examples to support your suggestion, which makes the recommendation more convincing.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

242 words

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