Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self- employed?
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general
Work on expanding your vocabulary and improving grammatical accuracy to avoid errors and enhance the clarity of your ideas.
task response
Try to provide more specific examples to support your main points. This adds depth to your arguments and demonstrates your understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea. Just as importantly, make sure the ideas between paragraphs flow logically to maintain cohesion.
task response
The essay addresses all parts of the question, discussing both reasons why people choose self-employment and its disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
You have included an introduction and conclusion, which gives your essay a clear structure.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...